John Morin

English 102-111

4 April 2012

Letter to Spencer Kiessling, Draft 1

Peer Review Letter to Spencer Kiessling for Essay 3

Dear Spencer,

            I enjoyed reading your essay on animal rights in the United States and the role PETA has in crusading for more awareness of the issue. It is a well-informed essay that, while informative, is easy to follow and understand. You clearly cover four distinct, independent perspectives that all have well-documented opinions on the issue, which helps the reader develop their own stance on the extreme measures PETA has taken.

There is little improvement that you can do in terms of the purpose of your essay. The prompt (Identify the individuals or groups of people interested in this issue, with a brief introduction to their positions. Describe at least four different positions on the issue, say who holds them, and give some of their reasons for holding them) is satisfied in full. The essay has solid transitions that do not inhibit the reader’s attention span, and it is brief enough (but not too brief) so that it is not overwhelming.

            I do have a few things I would like to bring up. Make sure for your information in the top left hand corner of the essay you change English 101 to English 102, which was most likely a slip up when you typed. I am not sure if there is a bibliography, or if it is just not included in what I was sent, but make sure that you have one. If you have information directly taken from sources, please cite them in your essay. Although I know that with these papers, where much of the essay is mere summary, citations aren’t always necessary.